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did you ever stare into the sun as she was falling behind the horizon
and realize
you're the one falling?

could you finally assimilate, during her spectacular dive,
the wonderous speed
at which you're moving?

did you ever walk barefoot by the roaring, receding ocean
and ponder in awe
the distant moon's attraction?

did you ever observe great orion plunge into a forest
and mourn
when the hunter didn't find his way home

but stands forever in cold space,
while we, in our na´vety, just keep going
around

and around

?
i did.
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013   Writer
I'm glad you did and wrote this terrific poetry to ask if we have. I have, too. Congratulations on the DLD "Pick of the Day." :clap: ... :+fav: ... Thank you.
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raido-ehwaz Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Professional Photographer
i'm glad you have, and thanks for reading! :)
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013   Writer
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CactussKate Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely! The language is beautiful. Such wordsss.
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raido-ehwaz Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Professional Photographer
thanks a lot, i really appreciate it! :)
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations and has been selected as our "Pick of the Day". It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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raido-ehwaz Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Professional Photographer
thank you so very much! :)
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jeepdork Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
i do agree with this perspective
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raido-ehwaz Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Professional Photographer
:)
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alapip Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hannele, this is super!

one little thing, "at" being
a preposition, [a thing you
shouldn't end a sentence
with], - ;) - switching
it around beginning with
an 'at which', would still
be rhythmic too, i think.
[2nd stanza, last line]

don't feel bad. everybody
does this, including me.

a question: have you had
a DLD lately?

:)pip
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raido-ehwaz Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Photographer
thank you very much, pip - that's exactly the kind of comment i need and want! :) i absolutely don't feel bad. and i'm very happy you like it!

i had one about a year ago, i think. or more.
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alapip Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
when i comes to prepositions,
i don't remember the definition
of them, from decades ago, but i
seem to feel them, [generally].
i google, just to make sure.

i think you might deserve a DLD
on this poem. i hope so... ;)
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raido-ehwaz Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Professional Photographer
this sounds better to me now, too. thanks for the correction!

thanks a lot, pip - already your opinion is enough for me!
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alapip Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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